You certainly have literary talent! You write with such a depth of feeling and rich use of language. I love those “aha!” moments, but they are so fleeting; like trying to grasp sublime smoke. You see so clearly for a second and then it evaporates. It’s as if Blake’s “doors of perception” open for one instant and you get a glimpse of something so much more than our everyday experience. It can fade as quickly as it appears and you are left wondering if it actually happened; although the tingling may last for days. I guess that is the awesomeness of reading another person’s description of IT; the joy of knowing that IT is not some isolated event in one’s own psyche, but a fascinating mystery of the human condition.
I can offer no improvement, but I spotted a repeated word in the final paragraph; “into”.